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Commonplaces final

CommonPlace 1:

IC.IC:

I want to see how our political philosophies approach space. I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.

  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space, so I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.
  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space; I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.
  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space while I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.

I have never really been into cars. I like really cool guitars.

  • I have never been into cars, but I like really cool guitars.
  • I have never been into cars; I like really cool guitars.
  • I have never been into cars while I like really cool guitars.

IC;IC:

I miss your smile; I still shed a tear.

  • I miss your smile, and I still shed a tear.
  • I miss your smile. I still shed a tear.
  • I miss your smile while I still shed a tear.

We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another; we live in a world where such differences matter.

  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another, and we live in a world where such differences matter.
  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another. We live in a world where such differences matter.
  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another while we live in a world where such differences matter.

*They all mean something different because their relationship changed.

*The difference is not big, but noticeable.

Commonplace: 2

Rhetorical pedagogies have a deep commitment to helping students make connections with public issues, including helping them understand how those issues affect them.

Although the actual means of pursuing this connection is unique to each scholar, there is some tacit agreement about the importance of helping students see the relevance of public issues in their individual lives.

–> The first topic sentence does not follow the “They say, I say” pattern, but the second does. Since it follows the “they say, I say” pattern, it has more sense, it is easier to read, and the sentence has more flow. When she expresses the “they say”, she emphasizes the other person’s opinion, but then she adds hers.

Commonplace 3:

-Sleep is my cardio.

sleep: noun (doing the verb)

is: verb (the action being made)

my: pronoun (specifies a noun; replaces nouns)

cardio: noun (follows what “sleep” is)

-In my own way: Slumber is my exercise.

Commonplace: 4

       This picture is stating that those bathrooms can be used by anyone, and their identity or circumstance has no importance. Everybody is allowed to enter bathroom, use it, and even lock it. This sign is located on the door for an easy-read; makes the people want to read it because of the location it is at. When the sign is “right at your face”, it is very difficult to ignore it. By this, it also allow many people to read its statement and be aware. The author of the sign is The American University’s Housing and Dining programs. The sign is authored because it demonstrates that the sign is true and valid, and it was not written by “anybody”. Since the sign is authored, it also gives the name of who people can contact for further information, questions, or concerns about the topic.

Commonplace: 5

“Shall Property owned by the University System of Georgia and utilized by providers of college and university student housing and other facilities continue to be exempt from taxation to keep costs affordable?”

  1. Shall property owned by the University System of Georgia continue to be exempt from taxation to keep costs affordable?
  2. shall, continue, exempt, taxation
  3. The unknown author created this sentence to make the audience think about the possibilities of having taxation or not. This sentence lets the audience process the situation and the doubt that is being stated in the sentence. Also, the audience can be several people such as the faculty of the university, the board, or even the students.

-The sentence is not very easy to read since it contains extra information in the middle of the subject and the verb.

Commonplace: 6

Original:

In order for everybody to feel comfortable and fit in, people need to be accommodated regarding how they feel comfortable. Bazelon depicts that accommodation is practical for everybody, and it is not fair that transgenders are not being accommodated just to accommodate females. Transgenders should feel comfortable and be treated like they belong wherever they feel identified, but, “it’s about relatively small adjustments for the sake of coexistence.” (Making Bathrooms More ‘Accommodating’). Although it is very hard for all people to come to an agreement since everybody has different opinions, many solutions can be enforced about the idea of “accommodation”, and not just the accommodation of transgenders, but of everybody, no matter their gender or their title.

New version:

In order for the everybody’s comfort, people need to be accommodated regarding their desires. Bazelon depicts that accommodation is practical for everybody, and it is unjust that transgenders are not being accommodated just to accommodate females. Transgenders should feel comfortable and be treated like they belong wherever they feel identified, but, “it’s about relatively small adjustments for the sake of coexistence.” (Making Bathrooms More ‘Accommodating’). Although it is hard for an agreement to settle between all people, many solutions can be enforced when it comes to accommodation, and not just the transgender’s accommodation, but everybody’s, no matter their gender or title.

Commonplace: 7

Discussing Fleming’s quote:

“[A]n education [. . .] that was designed to support a truly direct, deliberative democracy [. . .] would be an education oriented to the ‘strong publics’ of decision-making rather than the ‘weak publics’ of opinion formation. (205)”

– In this quote, Fleming discusses and expresses his opinion in how democracy is visioned and present in education. He states how democracy has allowed people to think and express themselves freely. People participate in government ideas, since their opinions matter, just as everyone else’s. The people in a democratic area are seen as a community instead of a plain society. People can participate, no matter their diversity, everyone is accepted and heard. All is done, for a better purpose for all.

Commonplace book: Fleming’s words entry

Discussing Fleming’s quote:

“[A]n education [. . .] that was designed to support a truly direct, deliberative democracy [. . .] would be an education oriented to the ‘strong publics’ of decision-making rather than the ‘weak publics’ of opinion formation. (205)”

– In this quote, Fleming discusses and expresses his opinion in how democracy is visioned and present in education. He states how democracy has allowed people to think and express themselves freely. People participate in government ideas, since their opinions matter, just as everyone else’s. The people in a democratic area are seen as a community instead of a plain society. People can participate, no matter their diversity, everyone is accepted and heard. All is done, for a better purpose for all.

Commonplace Entry #6

Original:

In order for everybody to feel comfortable and fit in, people need to be accommodated regarding how they feel comfortable. Bazelon depicts that accommodation is practical for everybody, and it is not fair that transgenders are not being accommodated just to accommodate females. Transgenders should feel comfortable and be treated like they belong wherever they feel identified, but, “it’s about relatively small adjustments for the sake of coexistence.” (Making Bathrooms More ‘Accommodating’). Although it is very hard for all people to come to an agreement since everybody has different opinions, many solutions can be enforced about the idea of “accommodation”, and not just the accommodation of transgenders, but of everybody, no matter their gender or their title.

New version:

In order for the everybody’s comfort, people need to be accommodated regarding their desires. Bazelon depicts that accommodation is practical for everybody, and it is unjust that transgenders are not being accommodated just to accommodate females. Transgenders should feel comfortable and be treated like they belong wherever they feel identified, but, “it’s about relatively small adjustments for the sake of coexistence.” (Making Bathrooms More ‘Accommodating’). Although it is hard for an agreement to settle between all people, many solutions can be enforced when it comes to accommodation, and not just the transgender’s accommodation, but everybody’s, no matter their gender or title. 

Commonplace-book Entry #5

“Shall Property owned by the University System of Georgia and utilized by providers of college and university student housing and other facilities continue to be exempt from taxation to keep costs affordable?”

  1. Shall property owned by the University System of Georgia continue to be exempt from taxation to keep costs affordable?
  2. shall, continue, exempt, taxation
  3. The unknown author created this sentence to make the audience think about the possibilities of having taxation or not. This sentence lets the audience process the situation and the doubt that is being stated in the sentence. Also, the audience can be several people such as the faculty of the university, the board, or even the students.

-The sentence is not very easy to read since it contains extra information in the middle of the subject and the verb.

Commonplace: picture entry

commonplace-book-assignment-1        This picture is stating that those bathrooms can be used by anyone, and their identity or circumstance has no importance. Everybody is allowed to enter bathroom, use it, and even lock it. This sign is located on the door for an easy-read; makes the people want to read it because of the location it is at. When the sign is “right at your face”, it is very difficult to ignore it. By this, it also allow many people to read its statement and be aware. The author of the sign is The American University’s Housing and Dining programs. The sign is authored because it demonstrates that the sign is true and valid, and it was not written by “anybody”. Since the sign is authored, it also gives the name of who people can contact for further information, questions, or concerns about the topic.

Commonplace Book: Entry 2: The conversation

 

Rhetorical pedagogies have a deep commitment to helping students make connections with public issues, including helping them understand how those issues affect them.

 

Although the actual means of pursuing this connection is unique to each scholar, there is some tacit agreement about the importance of helping students see the relevance of public issues in their individual lives.

 

–> The first topic sentence does not follow the “They say, I say” pattern, but the second does. Since it follows the “they say, I say” pattern, it has more sense, it is easier to read, and the sentence has more flow. When she expresses the “they say”, she emphasizes the other person’s opinion, but then she adds hers.

Commonplace: Entry 1

IC.IC:

I want to see how our political philosophies approach space. I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.

  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space, so I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.
  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space; I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.
  • I want to see how our political philosophies approach space while I begin by discussing two prevalent traditions of modern political thought.

I have never really been into cars. I like really cool guitars.

  • I have never been into cars, but I like really cool guitars.
  • I have never been into cars; I like really cool guitars.
  • I have never been into cars while I like really cool guitars.

 

IC;IC:

I miss your smile; I still shed a tear.

  • I miss your smile, and I still shed a tear.
  • I miss your smile. I still shed a tear.
  • I miss your smile while I still shed a tear.

We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another; we live in a world where such differences matter.

  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another, and we live in a world where such differences matter.
  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another. We live in a world where such differences matter.
  • We are undeniably and inescapably different from one another while we live in a world where such differences matter.

 

 

*They all mean something different because their relationship changed.

*The difference is not big, but noticeable.