Commonplace Book: Entry 1

Sentences from my public health listeriosis case study:

1. ”The babies had been born in the previous two weeks in towns in the western part of Pennsylvania. They were not well.”

The babies had been born in the previous two weeks in towns in the western part of Pennsylvania, and they were not well.

The babies had been born in the previous two weeks in towns in the western part of Pennsylvania; they were not well.

2. ”The babies were not part of the outbreak. Their PFGE patterns had not matched the outbreak strain.”

The babies were not part of the outbreak; their PFGE patterns had not matched the outbreak strain.

The babies were not part of the outbreak because their PFGE patterns had not matched the outbreak strain.

3. ”She was the oldest; she had a brother and sister who were twins.”

She was the oldest. She had a brother and sister who were twins.

She was the oldest since she had a younger brother and sister who were twins.

4. ”Taupe was an internist approaching fifty whose thick hair had gone prematurely silver; he sported a formidable mustache and almost always wore a bowtie.”

Taupe was an internist approaching fifty whose thick hair had gone prematurely silver. He sported a formidable mustache and almost always wore a bowtie.

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