How this essay shows Personal Expression and critical thinking

For assignment one, I was required to write an exploratory essay using your experience reading a text from this course as a starting point to create new insights into your thinking on a particular topic. I wrote my essay, titled “Why the Concert and Event Industry Should Regulate Ticket Scalping,” which focuses on the issue of wealth inequality, drawing parallels between historical events and the current practices in the concert and event industry. Using J. Drew Lanham’s “Forever Gone” as a starting point, I highlighted the historical exploitation for economic gain and its consequences, relating it to the modern problem of ticket scalping. I explored how scalping harms both customers and promoters, emphasizing the need for ethical action in the industry. My essay suggested legal, technological, and social solutions to tackle ticket scalping, citing various studies and examples to support my arguments.
In my exploratory essay, I effectively utilized critical thinking to construct an argument about the issue of ticket scalping in the concert and event industry. Drawing on various sources, I examined the problem from multiple perspectives, including historical parallels, economic implications, and ethical considerations. This comprehensive approach demonstrated my ability to analyze complex issues deeply, synthesizing information from different fields. On the other hand, the essay revealed areas for growth in personal expression. While my arguments were well-founded and analytical, they lacked a distinct personal touch that would have made the writing more relatable and made it more “explore”.
This assignment revealed that, although I am proficient in critical thinking, I need to further develop my skills in personal expression. Even though personal elements were included, they did not fully capture the exploratory personal engagement typically expected in such essays.